Redneck Haiku

In the morning mist
Mama searchs Circle K
For Moon Pies and Redman

 

OK,I didn't like it much either.

 

Soppy dr missed it when you posted it.

 

Thanks Richard, but it was a weak effort.

 

I just found this - I like it!

Beneath the neon,
The trailer park is lovely
Every blink that's off.

 

I used to live there. I remember the blinking light.

 

When yore wife runs off
You can borrow mah pick-up
And winch back yore wench.

(ouch)

Plastic hula-girl
Bobbing beside my gun rack -
That's the gal for me.

 

I missed it dr but thats nothing new when I got on here tonight I had 107 new post clicked to see them and I saw one of them and then I had none.Then my search was on so if I miss some post its because my puter has lost its ever loving mind.

 

The skeeters aren't bad,
You're holding that beer for me?
Let's go tip some cows!

*snirk* Okay, I'll stop now. ;-)

 

Desert, the sybillance of the second line is impressive, vivid imagery and sense of place, the moon pie reference echoing the fading orb in morning mist is quite brilliant. I'm a former english major, and I love it!

 

Thank you, critter. I always kind of liked it myself, for that line.